In color, I tweaked the sizing a bit.

As noted in the previous post, I did not like the way the watermark sat off on the side. I readjusted to center the mark to my mouse type. I looks and feels better.

You notice pretty quickly after your comp where your placement of pictures and content goes wrong. I readjusted this after seeing my comps.

Looking at it from afar, the paragraphs become just blocks and I liked the idea of making the final paragraph a similar style to the picture's beginning passage of their paradise lost.